Post by Dark on Apr 23, 2008 11:17:04 GMT 2
I've edited the fanfiction by quite alot, and ive removed as much of the errors as i could. Comments pl0x.
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Chapter – Age of Darkness Part I
Darkness covered the sky as night fell. He sighed and put on his custom designed Visualizer. As usual, radio waves ran through the skies. They gleamed and shimmered. It was an amazing sight if you saw it for the first time. Perhaps a profile of our character here would be appropriate.
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Dark, aged sixteen. Orphan. Teen. Bio Subject. Speed and strength enchanced. All set by
his parents. A profile has been recorded by a descendant of Subaru Hoshikiwa.
Name: Dark Evangelist.
Age: 16.
Appearance: Silvery Red hair, wears black jacket with red shirt, vintage jeans, dark grey gloves.
Gender: Male
Specific Talents: Unkown.
Background and Assumed Story:
He was a bio subject, and also secretly a bio subject.
A attack of rogue FMs occoured at 14 years old. His neighbourhood was destroyed.
Dark was knocked out in an attempt to fight a FM, scarring his right arm and left alone, lying on the ruins of his house.
When Dark woke up, he walked over to his parents bodies. Tears ran down his cheek.
But when he stopped, he saw the passageway to his house basement.
His father had forbidden him to go there. Dark asserted himself,
and walked in. Mostly everything was destroyed, quite untouched though,
was a desk. Dark walked up to it, what he saw made the final impact on him.
There were pictures of him suspended in machine, pictures that they were attempting
to ‘modify’ him. Dark threw down the pictures, and ran, never turning back, tears once more running down. Eventually, he found out enough to know his speed and strength was actually far greater than any average human. But during the FM attack,
Rockman himself, though indirectly, was responsible for the destruction of Dark’s home and family. FMs had struck strongly and quickly, forcing Rockman to repeatedly use battlecards. The
FMs started to gather on the roof of Dark’s home, and in the process of destroying them the house was damaged in the process and it collapsed just as the remaining FMs retreated. Dark’s parents were trapped in the living room and eventually died due to lack of air. Dark’s sister was killed by a FM, ripped to pieces. After 3 days, Dark settled all the blame onto Rockman, AKA Subaru Hoshikiwa.
After a few nights of planning and thought, Dark started to trace Rockman. He followed his moves, learning everything of his movements. He started to train himself secretly,
In the remains of a friends house, as he refused to go near his home anymore.
Finally, he finished mastering offensive and defensive skills from Martial Arts and other sort of things. But a thought struck him. He could not defeat him.
Subaru merged with War Rock was stronger than any human. He resigned himself to fate and walked to Echo Ridge’s lookout.
He had put on his customized vizualizer, which were mass produced after the FM King’s attack on Earth.
Dark stood the very same spot where Subaru had met War Rock. And a very similar thing happened. Dark met a rebel FM. ForteHound. ForteHound had found Dark’s wave very queer. Matching, EXACTLY with his own. ForteHound, is War Rock’s little brother. Unwilling to join the FMs in the mass brotherband with Earth, thus running off to find a host as to attack Earth once more. Eventually ForteHound with his life alongside Dark, had given the notion up of destroying Earth, and joining Dark with his goal: To take down Rockman. The-:/The File Is Corrupt. Please Restart an-!%!@#%!F134154@$!tgqy->?Y/N:/$_^
That was what remained of the profile, at least.
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A wave suddenly moved in another direction. Dark’s eyes flicked towards it and the colour shifted from a deep red to a deep black almost blending with the night sky. Then it started to get bigger. Dark lingered too long and finally realizing what it was. By then the wave slammed into him. A light enveloped him…
Dark shook off the pain. He tried to open his eyes, and squeezed them shut again. The light was bright. This time, he slowly opened them. He saw a silhouette... It was humanoid... Wait... it was floating... Then he saw it. He didn’t run. He was never scared. His dark heart which was etched with pain and hatred ensured that.
The figure was what appeared to be an FM. Its body radiated a malovent red aura and darkness surrounded it. Dark spoke, “If you want to kill me, go ahead. I had enough of this sick world.”
The creature paused for a moment. It started to chuckle. “I am not like my brethren. They are weak, in terms of strength and the mind. My name is ForteHound. And I too, wish to wreak vengeance against someone. Someone who has caused you great pain.” Dark immediately knew who.
“It’s Rockman, isn’t it?”
“Correct.”
Dark stared at his scar on his arm, a memento of his attempt to seek revenge for his family.
“I offer to work together, human. And inflict infinite pain upon Rockman.”
After a few minutes, Dark raised his head.
“I accept your offer.”
End-
Next – [Age of Darkness Part II]
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Chapter – Age of Darkness Part I
Darkness covered the sky as night fell. He sighed and put on his custom designed Visualizer. As usual, radio waves ran through the skies. They gleamed and shimmered. It was an amazing sight if you saw it for the first time. Perhaps a profile of our character here would be appropriate.
--
Dark, aged sixteen. Orphan. Teen. Bio Subject. Speed and strength enchanced. All set by
his parents. A profile has been recorded by a descendant of Subaru Hoshikiwa.
Name: Dark Evangelist.
Age: 16.
Appearance: Silvery Red hair, wears black jacket with red shirt, vintage jeans, dark grey gloves.
Gender: Male
Specific Talents: Unkown.
Background and Assumed Story:
He was a bio subject, and also secretly a bio subject.
A attack of rogue FMs occoured at 14 years old. His neighbourhood was destroyed.
Dark was knocked out in an attempt to fight a FM, scarring his right arm and left alone, lying on the ruins of his house.
When Dark woke up, he walked over to his parents bodies. Tears ran down his cheek.
But when he stopped, he saw the passageway to his house basement.
His father had forbidden him to go there. Dark asserted himself,
and walked in. Mostly everything was destroyed, quite untouched though,
was a desk. Dark walked up to it, what he saw made the final impact on him.
There were pictures of him suspended in machine, pictures that they were attempting
to ‘modify’ him. Dark threw down the pictures, and ran, never turning back, tears once more running down. Eventually, he found out enough to know his speed and strength was actually far greater than any average human. But during the FM attack,
Rockman himself, though indirectly, was responsible for the destruction of Dark’s home and family. FMs had struck strongly and quickly, forcing Rockman to repeatedly use battlecards. The
FMs started to gather on the roof of Dark’s home, and in the process of destroying them the house was damaged in the process and it collapsed just as the remaining FMs retreated. Dark’s parents were trapped in the living room and eventually died due to lack of air. Dark’s sister was killed by a FM, ripped to pieces. After 3 days, Dark settled all the blame onto Rockman, AKA Subaru Hoshikiwa.
After a few nights of planning and thought, Dark started to trace Rockman. He followed his moves, learning everything of his movements. He started to train himself secretly,
In the remains of a friends house, as he refused to go near his home anymore.
Finally, he finished mastering offensive and defensive skills from Martial Arts and other sort of things. But a thought struck him. He could not defeat him.
Subaru merged with War Rock was stronger than any human. He resigned himself to fate and walked to Echo Ridge’s lookout.
He had put on his customized vizualizer, which were mass produced after the FM King’s attack on Earth.
Dark stood the very same spot where Subaru had met War Rock. And a very similar thing happened. Dark met a rebel FM. ForteHound. ForteHound had found Dark’s wave very queer. Matching, EXACTLY with his own. ForteHound, is War Rock’s little brother. Unwilling to join the FMs in the mass brotherband with Earth, thus running off to find a host as to attack Earth once more. Eventually ForteHound with his life alongside Dark, had given the notion up of destroying Earth, and joining Dark with his goal: To take down Rockman. The-:/The File Is Corrupt. Please Restart an-!%!@#%!F134154@$!tgqy->?Y/N:/$_^
That was what remained of the profile, at least.
--
A wave suddenly moved in another direction. Dark’s eyes flicked towards it and the colour shifted from a deep red to a deep black almost blending with the night sky. Then it started to get bigger. Dark lingered too long and finally realizing what it was. By then the wave slammed into him. A light enveloped him…
Dark shook off the pain. He tried to open his eyes, and squeezed them shut again. The light was bright. This time, he slowly opened them. He saw a silhouette... It was humanoid... Wait... it was floating... Then he saw it. He didn’t run. He was never scared. His dark heart which was etched with pain and hatred ensured that.
The figure was what appeared to be an FM. Its body radiated a malovent red aura and darkness surrounded it. Dark spoke, “If you want to kill me, go ahead. I had enough of this sick world.”
The creature paused for a moment. It started to chuckle. “I am not like my brethren. They are weak, in terms of strength and the mind. My name is ForteHound. And I too, wish to wreak vengeance against someone. Someone who has caused you great pain.” Dark immediately knew who.
“It’s Rockman, isn’t it?”
“Correct.”
Dark stared at his scar on his arm, a memento of his attempt to seek revenge for his family.
“I offer to work together, human. And inflict infinite pain upon Rockman.”
After a few minutes, Dark raised his head.
“I accept your offer.”
End-
Next – [Age of Darkness Part II]
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